Pre-Production Evaluation

The coursework task was to create a new television drama of our choice; the pre-production stage was to write a script of 10-15 minutes of any selected part of one episode.
Firstly I decided it would be good idea to write down my favourite existing TV programmes and decide which parts I like about them and why so I could begin to consider what would happen in my TV drama. This is how I came to the conclusion that I would create a reality TV show.
Once I had decided on the content of our TV drama, I wrote a brief describing my idea in more detail. I had decided that I was going create a reality TV show showcasing the talent of household Zombies, set in the near future. This of course would be more of a mockumentary than anything but will have many elements of Drama within it. I decided that I would write my script for a sequence from the middle of the final episode.
Next I created my questionnaire, I asked open questions to people from my target audience so I could get a better understanding of what they would like to see from my TV drama, I asked people about their television habits and what their favourite shows/channels are and I asked them what they thought about my idea. This allowed me to shape my drama around my target audience more effectively, however I found one massive flaw in my plans, I found that people did not understand what I was trying to do with my tv drama as I had merged too many different genres into one, I found that I would either have to explain myself more clearly or make the programme more simple. In addition to this I analysed the data I was given back afterwards. As I asked open questions, it was hard for me to turn my data into a graph so I evaluated all of the answers I was given and simplified them into a list of criteria that would improve my idea.
I then created my first draft of my script, I had no knowledge of how scripts were structured as I had done no analysis at this point, so my script was unprofessional and massively simplified. After I realized this, I began researching scripts, I looked at one American and one British TV script for comedies and found that they were very much alike. After I had researched this I applied the basic principles of the script to my own, mostly focusing on the layout and appearance of my script.
After I had done research on the layout of the script, I focused on researching actual TV programmes, I analysed 3 TV shows and looked for elements in the mise-en-scene and cinematography so that I could use these in my stage directions to improve my script further.
After much research, I took my script once more to be analysed by the public, I created a focus group of my target audience and asked open questions so I could find out their response to my script . This was better than asking questions in the form of a questionnaire as I did last time as it allowed me to ask questions openly and converse with each person to get a more detailed response.
After this I looked at how to make my script more visually appealing and carried out research into how to make my script look more professional by using fonts and layouts. I also added a lot more stage directions as it would increase the success of my next step, which was to have a focus group act out my screenplay so I could evaluate it and see if there was anything that needed to be changed for my final draft. Before I did this however I quickly spell checked and proofread my script to make sure everything was accurate and spelled correctly
Whilst my script was being acted out, I found that a few lines were hard to be read through and some of the stage directions were too vague or too open to interpretation and this meant that it didn’t look the way I wanted it to in some parts so I tweaked my script once more and had my actors try again, this time it was more of a success and everything could be followed smoothly and lines could be read correctly.              
My script had now reached the end of the Pre-Production process and all I had left to do was spell check the script once more and make any small tweaks to it, resulting in the final outcome of the script.
The majority of my research used came from internet sources, all of my research was taken carefully into consideration as it can be bias or unreliable as internet articles are not always written by professionals. Also, in order to evaluate my own work, it was important to listen to responses from real people who come from my target audience so that I could create what they wanted. In conclusion, I think that the success of my script comes from listening to the views and opinions of others, otherwise my script would not be appealing to my target audience at all.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                            

Brief

Pre-Production –

For my Pre-Production I am going to create a 10 minute script of a television Drama. This drama will be set in the near future after a zombie apocalypse where ‘Zombies’ are kept as household help and used for entertainment purposes. The Television drama will see a group of zombies in a talent showcase and each week one or two Zombies will be eliminated from the competition. The show will be aired on BBC3 at 11PM on Friday nights for lasting one hour for six weeks. My Drama is aimed at young adults, from 16-24 as it will have a lot of gruesome comedy in it.

Production –

I am going to design a DVD cover for my TV drama and a poster that will promote the release of it to the public.

Final Draft

Dying To Be Famous

Final Scene – Episode 5

Characters:

Allison (Zombie contestant 1)

Marc (Zombie contestant 2)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1 (Human)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2 (Human)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 (Human)

Tim & Tom (Human)

Backstage Help (Human)

Allison’s mother (Human)

INT – BACKSTAGE – EVENING

10 minutes into the show as the OBSCURE CELEBRITY JUDGES have already been introduced and have sat down, one is a small bald man who looks to be some kind of celebrity chef, another is tall and blonde, wearing a skimp dress and far too much makeup, she is unmistakeable American, the third is of a medium build and is dressed in a quirky but sickly Hawaiian shirt. Everybody is preparing for the first act. ALLISON, who is tall with matted red hair and severe wounds over her face and body, she is dressed in a mud and blood covered yellow summer dress and only one sandal. Allison is standing backstage with the BACKSTAGE HELP holding a chain attached to a collar around her neck.

BH:

Are you ready for this?

Allison:

(nods and grunts)

BH:

Okay – Here we go.

TIM:

                           We are backstage here

with Allison, the first

performer of the night.

TIM/TOM:

Best of luck Allison

Allison walks onto stage waving and the crowd cheers. She stands centre stage and the backstage help connects the other end of the chain to the stage and runs backstage again

OBSCURE CELEBRITY JUDGE 1:

Okay Allison, it’s the first

act of the night, you’ll have

to set the bar here. We’re

almost in the semi-finals

and you have a lot to lose.

In your own time.

Allison:

(to the tune of ‘fireworks’

 by Katy Perry)

grrrrrrruuuuuuuuhmmmmmmmmmm hhhhuuuuuuummmmmmmfffffffffffff

Ffiiiiiiiiiiiii bffffffff wooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhh

(Mumbling zombie noises)

One buzzer sound lights up a red cross above the stage

Allison cont.:

(more mumbling)

brfffffffffffff wooooooooooh

A second buzzer sounds shortly after the first. Allison starts to look saddened as she carries on ‘singing’

Allison cont.:

(mumbling)

Gruhmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm huuuuuuuumfffffffffffffff

(Raises voice for finale

of the song)

FIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIBHUFF

FFFFFFFFFFFFFFWOOOOOOOOOOO

OOOHHHHHHHH

She stops singing and smiles at the judges, black ooze spills from her mouth down her dress. A buzzer repeatedly sounds; switch shot to Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 repeatedly pressing the button with a disinterested expression

OBSCURE CELEBRITY JUDGE 3:

Well Allison I have to say,

we gave you a chance and you’re

just not taking it.

We expected a lot from you and

what you have brought is just

utter garbage. We are aware

That you are decomposing and

your voice box is beginning

to rot but we expect

more Allison.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1:

I’m afraid I just have to agree.

I know the chains get in the way

but all the contestants have

to sing the same way.

Everybody else in this competition

is decomposing too and they

are doing just fine.

OBSCURE CELEBRITY JUDGE 2:

We will

just have to see what the audience thinks, But we are very disappointed Allison.

Stage help runs back on to the stage and unhooks Allison who looks like she is about to start crying and takes her backstage where she starts uncontrollably wailing, greeted by Tim and Tom who she runs past

Tim:

Well I don’t think that went

quite to plan did it Tom

Tom:

I think not Tim

Tim:

Hopefully the audience will

help young Allison eh Tom

Tom:

Hopefully Tim

Tim:

And now, Marc is preparing

Backstage for his performance.

Having seen Allison’s act I think

he feels like he does not have much

to worry about.

MARC, who is smug looking, blonde and tall, covered in wounds and is missing an arm. He is wearing a blue button up shirt which is buttoned incorrectly and stained brown corduroys. Marc enters and scene cuts to Allison who is running to find her mother

INT – FAMILY ROOM – EVENING

The family room is cosy and well lit, there are several blue sofas and paintings hung on the wall, there are orange cushions on the sofas and a white shag rug on the floor. ALLISONS MOTHER is sat on one of the sofas looking extremely tense clutching her small handbag and biting her lip. Allison’s mother is Human and is very tan with shoulder length blonde hair, she looks middle ages and is dressed formally. She is disturbed by Allison who runs into the room.

Allison:

(worried) Mrfffhhhhhhhh!

Allison’s Mother:

Allison, Pumpkin,

Its okay!

Allison’s Mother hands her a human arm

Allison’s Mother Cont.:

Here darling

this will make you feel better

Allison’s Mother hugs her and she continues to wail whilst beginning to chew on the arm

INT – BACKSTAGE - EVENING

Tim:

Well it looks like Allison

is really not taking the news well.

Right Tom?

Tom:

Right Tim, Sometimes the judges

are harsh but fair. Right Tim?

Tim:

Right Tom, Now to our second act

of the night – Marc.

Tom/Tim:

Best of luck Marc

INT – STAGE – EVENING

Marc stood centre stage and the stagehand hurries away as before

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1:

Okay Marc.

You don’t exactly have a tough act to follow here, but don’t take that as an easy victory, we still need you to give it your all.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2:

Ready when

you are Marc.

Marc:

(Singing to the tune of ‘Sex

is on fire’ – Mumbling sounds almost identical to Allison’s)

YOOOOOOOOO SSSSSSSSSHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

HHHH FFFFFFFFFFFFFFIIIIIIIIIIHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

HHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

INT – BACKSTAGE - EVENING

Allison Is standing at the side of the stage with black tears on her face and a jealous expression

Marc cont.:

WIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII

III OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHN

TUUUUU WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHH

FLLLLLLLLLLLLLUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU

UUURRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR SSSSSSAAAAAXXXXXXXXXXX SSSSSSSSSSOOOOOOOOONNNNNNN FUUUUUUUUUURRRR

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1:

That was amazing Marc. It’s almost a miracle that

your singing can sound so human already; I can really see a rising star in you

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2:

I can see raw talent just oozing out of you Marc

Black ooze spills from an open wound on Marc’s knee and lands on the stage with a squelch, Marc smiles

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2 cont.:

that pure talent just needs to be controlled and tamed and you can be a superstar! Somebody get him a towel.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 has no input but nods proudly, Stage help comes and unchains Marc, Taking him backstage

Tim:

Well that was just great, and the judges loved it too! Right Tom?

Tom:

Right Tim. Looks like we might have a winner here

INT – BACKSTAGE – LATE EVENING

Marc enters and Allison jumps on him, trying to bite him, she succeeds and grabs hold of Marc’s arms pulling him to the floor, the pair begin to fight and bite at each other’s limbs, everybody around seems completely nonchalant about the situation and watches intently. The audience can be heard roaring in the background as the curtain is pulled further so that the fight is visable

Tim:

(Standing behind the scuffle with Tom) Looks like Allison might be a little Jealous of Marc’s feedback Tom.

Tom:

I think so Tim, look there goes Marc’s ear.

Tim: I think it’s safe to say that Allison is in the wrong show.

Tom:

Yes Tim, Pro wrestling would seem more appropriate

Scuffle continues as both Allison and Marc continue bite chunks out of each other, nobody attempts to restrain them

Tom cont.:

Ooh look, there goes the Jugular, That might affect Allison’s singing further eh Tim

Tim:

Right Tom, I don’t fancy Marc’s chanced with that hole in his stomach either.

Tom:

That’s what this competition is all about though Tim.

Tim: That’s right Tom. That’s right:

Scene ends with Tim, Tom and the stage help watching the scuffle contently

End.

Fourth Draft. (Spell checked and proofread)

Dying To Be Famous

Characters:

Allison (Zombie contestant 1)

Marc (Zombie contestant 2)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1 (Human)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2 (Human)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 (Human)

Tim & Tom (Human)

Backstage Help (Human)

Allison’s mother (Human)

(Takes place 10 minutes into the show as the obscure celebrity judges have already been introduced and have sat down, everybody is preparing for the first act. Allison is standing backstage with the backstage help holding a chain attached to a collar around her neck)

BH: Are you ready for this?

Allison: (nods and grunts)

BH: Okay – Here we go.

Tim: We are backstage here with Allison, the first performer of the night.

Tim/Tom: Best of luck Allison

(Allison walks onto stage waving and the crowd cheers. She stands centre stage and the backstage help connects the other end of the chain to the stage and runs backstage again)

Obscure Judge 1: Okay Allison, it’s the first act of the night, you’ll have to set the bar here. We’re almost in the semi-finals and you have a lot to lose. In your own time.

Allison: (to the tune of ‘fireworks’ by Katy Perry) grrrrrrruuuuuuuuhmmmmmmmmmm hhhhuuuuuuummmmmmmfffffffffffff

Ffiiiiiiiiiiiii bffffffff wooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhh

(Mumbling zombie noises)

(One buzzer sound lights up a red cross above the stage)

Allison cont.: (more mumbling)

brfffffffffffff wooooooooooh

(A second buzzer sounds shortly after the first. Allison starts to look saddened as she carries on ‘singing’)

Allison cont.: (mumbling)

Gruhmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm huuuuuuuumfffffffffffffff

(Raises voice for finale of the song)

FIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIBHUFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHH

(She stops singing and smiles at the judges, black ooze spills from her mouth down her dress. A buzzer repeatedly sounds; switch shot to Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 repeatedly pressing the button with a disinterested expression)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 3: Well Allison I have to say, we gave you a chance and you’re just not taking it. We expected a lot from you and what you have brought is just utter garbage. We are aware that you are decomposing and your voice box is beginning to rot but we expect more Allison.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1: I’m afraid I just have to agree. I know the chains get in the way but all the contestants have to sing the same way. Everybody else in this competition is decomposing too and they are doing just fine.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2: We will just have to see what the audience thinks, But we are very disappointed Allison.

(Stage help runs back on to the stage and unhooks Allison who looks like she is about to start crying and takes her backstage where she starts uncontrollably wailing, greeted by Tim and Tom who she runs past)

Tim: Well I don’t think that went quite to plan did it Tom

Tom: I think not Tim

Tim: Hopefully the audience will help young Allison eh Tom

Tom: Hopefully Tim

Tim: And now, Marc is preparing backstage for his performance. Having seen Allison’s act I think he feels like he does not have much to worry about.

(Marc enters and scene cuts to Allison who is running to find her mother)

Allison: (worried) Mrfffhhhhhhhh!

(Allison’s Mother enters)

Allison’s Mother: Allison, Pumpkin, Its okay!

(Allison’s Mother hands her a human arm)

Allison’s Mother Cont.: Here darling this will make you feel better

(Allison’s Mother hugs her and she continues to wail whilst beginning to chew on the arm)

Tim: Well it looks like Allison is really not taking the news well. Right Tom?

Tom: Right Tim, Sometimes the judges are harsh but fair. Right Tim?

Tim: Right Tom, Now to our second act of the night – Marc.

Tom/Tim: Best of luck Marc

(Cuts to Marc stood centre stage and the stagehand hurries away as before)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1: Okay Marc. You don’t exactly have a tough act to follow here, but don’t take that as an easy victory, we still need you to give it your all.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2: Ready when you are Marc.

Marc: (Singing to the tune of ‘Sex is on fire’ – Mumbling sounds almost identical to Allison’s)

YOOOOOOOOO SSSSSSSSSHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH FFFFFFFFFFFFFFIIIIIIIIIIHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

(Cut to Allison standing at the side of the stage with black tears on her face and a jealous expression)

WIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHN TUUUUU WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHH

FLLLLLLLLLLLLLUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUURRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR SSSSSSAAAAAXXXXXXXXXXX SSSSSSSSSSOOOOOOOOONNNNNNN FUUUUUUUUUURRRR

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1: That was amazing Marc. It’s almost a miracle that your singing can sound so human already; I can really see a rising star in you

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2: I can see raw talent just oozing out of you Marc

(Black ooze spills from an open wound on Marc’s knee and lands on the stage with a squelch, Marc smiles)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2 cont.: that pure talent just needs to be controlled and tamed and you can be a superstar!

(Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 has no input but nods proudly, Stage help comes and unchains Marc, Taking him backstage)

Tim: Well that was just great, and the judges loved it too! Right Tom?

Tom: Right Tim. Looks like we might have a winner here

(Marc enters and Allison jumps on him, trying to bite him)

Tim: (Standing behind the scuffle with Tom) Looks like Allison might be a little Jealous of Marc’s feedback Tom.

Tom: I think so Tim, look there goes Marc’s ear.

Tim: I think it’s safe to say that Allison is in the wrong show.

Tom: Yes Tim, Pro wrestling would seem more appropriate

(Scuffle continues as both Allison and Marc continue bite chunks out of each other, nobody attempt to restrain them)

Tom cont.: Ooh look, there goes the Jugular, That might affect Allison’s singing further eh Tim

Tim: Right Tom, I don’t fancy Marc’s chanced with that hole in his stomach either.

Tom: That’s what this competition is all about though Tim.

Tim: That’s right Tom. That’s right:

(Scene ends with Tim, Tom and the stage help watching the scuffle contently)

End.

Generic conventions of scripts.

After researching two different scripts, one British television and one American i have found that the conventions of both are extremely similar. The basic conventions of both scripts are that stage directions should be bracketed and clear, short also and open to improvisation for the actors. The text should also be paragraphed after each separate character has spoken and it should be clear who's lines belong to who, i found that the scripts are also usually center aligned rather than aligned to the left. The american scripts seems to portray the characters as more well spoken, even though they are both comedy texts i suspect this is down to differences in culture and the way we perceive humor. The only big difference between both scripts i looked at was that in the American text there was no kind of set description throughout, this may be because the setting is familiar as the show is set in the same place throughout the series however there is no mention of props or anything within the stage directions however there is a set description and use of props and even extras in the British script.

Genre Analysis.

   Skins - Teen drama.
Firstly, as this is the 3rd series of skins, the title font is similar to the seasons before it, despite the appearance of a full new cast, although the title 'skins' can be interpreted in many ways, it actually refers to the drug usage within the text. This gives some idea about how the characters will be portrayed in the text, as the text deals with heavy drug usage, alcohol abuse, death, sexuality and other issues surrounding the teenage generation. Above the title there is a review from HEAT magazine and NME, HEAT and NME have been used because, as it is aimed at teenagers/young adults, it is more appealing than The Guardian for example as it is more likely that the audience of this text are also an audience for HEAT and NME.
The cover image is of all of the characters separate images clustered together, The facial expressions of each character alone give the audience an inkling of what the character will be like. For example, Cook (Second left) has a cheeky but aggressive expression, which directly represents the way his character acts in the text. The blurb briefly describes the characters but not much of the plot.

Two and a Half Men
The representations of the characters featured on the cover of this dvd are quite simple and do not tell us much about the characters as they are all dressed in suits with relatively blank facial expressions, this is because it is season 6 of the programme and the characters are highly famous and well known and do not need a representative introduction on the cover of the dvd. The title font is the same title used in the episodes for the main title and credits also. On the back cover we see a collage of stills from episodes which introduced new characters and gives the audience an idea of what might happen in this series, for example Melissa is featured in one of the images (top right) so we are given the idea that we will be introduced to a new character who may drive the storyline. There is also a still of Micheal Clarke Duncan who did a small cameo in two of the episodes, as well as Steven Tyler of Aerosmith. Again extra material is included in the dvd which is a way of selling the dvd effectively because it is 'never before seen' and would be hard to see other than getting the actual dvd. The genre of the text is obviously a comedy and this is shown by some of the images on the back of the cover which shows various characters in comedic situations, the characters are better represented on the back of the dvd cover as far as their personalities are concerned.

Charlie Brookers Black Mirror.
The first thing that is noticed about this dvd cover is that every main character from all three episodes is displayed on the front, all of which in stills from the actual episode they star in. this instantly gives the audience an idea of what the episodes will be about, but does not give too much away. it would be more obvious to a fan of the series rather than a first time viewer. 

Third Draft

Dying To Be Famous

Characters:

Allison (Zombie contestant 1)

Marc (Zombie contestant 2)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1 (Human)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2 (Human)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 (Human)

Tim & Tom (Human)

Backstage Help (Human)

Allison’s mother (Human)

(Takes place 10 minutes into the show as the obscure celebrity judges have already been introduced and have sat down, everybody is preparing for the first act. Allison is standing backstage with the backstage help holding a chain attached to a collar around her neck)

BH: Are you ready for this?

Allison: (nods and grunts)

BH: Okay – Here we go.

Tim: We are backstage here with Allison, the first performer of the night.

Tim/Tom: Best of luck Allison

(Allison walks onto stage waving and the crowd cheers. She stands centre stage and the backstage help connects the other end of the chain to the stage and runs backstage again)

Obscure Judge 1: Okay Allison, it’s the first act of the night, you’ll have to set the bar here. We’re almost in the semi-finals and you have a lot to loose. In your own time.

Allison: (to the tune of ‘fireworks’ by katy perry) grrrrrrruuuuuuuuhmmmmmmmmmm hhhhuuuuuuummmmmmmfffffffffffff

Ffiiiiiiiiiiiii bffffffff wooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhh

(Mumbling zombie noises)

(One buzzer sound lights up a red cross above the stage)

Allison cont.: (more mumbling)

brfffffffffffff wooooooooooh

(a second buzzer sounds shortly after the first. Allison starts to look saddened as she carries on ‘singing’)

Allison cont.: (mumbling)

Gruhmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm huuuuuuuumfffffffffffffff

(raises voice for finale of the song)

FIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIBHUFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHH

(she stops singing and smiles at the judges, black ooze spills from her mouth down her dress. A buzzer repeatedly sounds, switch shot to Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 repeatedly pressing the button with a disinterested expression)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 3: Well Allison I have to say, we gave you a chance and you’re just not taking it. We expected a lot from you and what you have brought is just utter garbage. We are aware that you are decomposing and your voice box is beginning to rot but we expect more Allison.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1: I’m afraid I just have to agree. I know the chains get in the way but all the contestants have to sing the same way. Everybody else in this competition is decomposing too and they are doing just fine.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2: We will just have to see what the audience thinks, But we are very disappointed Allison.

(Stage help runs back on to the stage and unhooks Allison who looks like she is about to start crying and takes her backstage where she starts uncontrollably wailing, greeted by Tim and Tom who she runs past)

Tim: Well I don’t think that went quite to plan did it Tom

Tom: I think not Tim

Tim: Hopefully the audience will help young Allison eh Tom

Tom: Hopefully Tim

Tim: And now, Marc is preparing backstage for his performance. Having seen Allison’s act I think he feels like he does not have much to worry about.

(Marc enters and scene cuts to Allison who is running to find her mother)

Allison: (worried) Mrfffhhhhhhhh!

(Allisons Mother enters)

Allison’s Mother: Allison, Pumpkin, Its okay!

(Allison’s Mother hands her a human arm)

Allison’s Mother Cont.: Here darling this will make you feel better

(Allison’s Mother hugs her and she continues to wail whilst beginning to chew on the arm)

Tim: Well it looks like Allison is really not taking the news well. Right Tom?

Tom: Right Tim, Sometimes the judges are harsh but fair. Right Tim?

Tim: Right Tom, Now to our second act of the night – Marc.

Tom/Tim: Best of luck Marc

(Cuts to Marc stood centre stage and the stagehand hurries away as before)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1: Okay Marc. You don’t exactly have a tough act to follow here, but don’t take that as an easy victory, we still need you to give it your all.

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2: Ready when you are Marc.

Marc: (Singing to the tune of ‘Sex is on fire’ – Mumbling sounds almost identical to Allison’s)

YOOOOOOOOO SSSSSSSSSHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH FFFFFFFFFFFFFFIIIIIIIIIIHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

(Cut to Allison standing at the side of the stage with black tears on her face and a jealous expression)

WIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHN TUUUUU WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHH

(Act finishes)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 1: That was amazing Marc. Its almost a miracle that your singing can sound so human already, I can really see a rising star in you

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2: I can see raw talent just oozing out of you Marc

(Black ooze spills from an open wound on Marc’s knee and lands on the stage with a squelch, Marc smiles)

Obscure Celebrity Judge 2 cont.: that pure talent just needs to be controlled and tamed and you can be a superstar!

(Obscure Celebrity Judge 3 has no input but nods proudly, Stage help comes and unchains Marc, Taking him backstage)

Tim: Well that was just great, and the judges loved it too! Right Tom?

Tom: Right Tim. Looks like we might have a winner here

(Marc enters and Allison Jump on him, trying to bite him)

Tim: (Standing behind the scuffle with Tom) Looks like Allison might be a little Jealous of Marc’s feedback Tom.

Tom: I think so Tim, look there goes Marc’s ear.

Tim: I think its safe to say that Allison is in the wrong show.

Tom: Yes Tim, Pro wrestling would seem more appropriate

(Scuffle continues as both Allison and Marc continue bite chunks out of each other, nobody attempt to restrain them)

Tom cont.: Ooh look, there goes the Jugular, That might affect Allison’s singing further eh Tim

Tim: Right Tom, I don’t fancy Marc’s chanced with that hole in his stomach either.

Tom: That’s what this competition is all about though Tim.

Tim: That’s right Tom. That’s right:

(Scene ends with Tim, Tom and the stage help watching the scuffle contently)

End.